Dear Usman
Bit confused about the concept or the totality, i think you should split this into 4 short poems as i persume each stanza conveys a separate thought. if your aim is to target a single point diversity factors should be avoided always. You have good poetic sense! Make use of it. Before publishing edit/ evaluate or discuss with somebody you most trust (with poetic sense. Dear Usman, I am not an adept on evaluations, nor a poet. I used to read a lot. This is my suggestions only. Best Wishes. Yesk Nair
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